Although ultimately I disagree with your characterization of Caspian, I forgive this for three reasons. Firstly that he is seen through Edmund's eyes; secondly that whether or not this character is canonical is immaterial given the story from which Edmund's interpretation arises; thirdly that the rest of this story is fucking awesome.
Further reflection of this story forces me to list the following three things I especially loved: firstly Eustace's paragraph, which containing the phrase keeping to his bed and prefacing names with "that horrible" and generally making himself a blight on ship-life is officially the best paragraph I can think of offhand; secondly the narrative voice, which is mostly Lewis and yet distinctly Pen and contains frequent hilarious parenthetical asides; thirldy Caspian would never be tempted; he would never hinge his world on a sweet.
I must, however, lodge a complaint against the imperfect beta job done, because this fic deserves much better than conspicuously absent commas.
In conclusion, four is too many paragraphs. Thank you.
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Date: 2005-12-12 03:59 am (UTC)Although ultimately I disagree with your characterization of Caspian, I forgive this for three reasons. Firstly that he is seen through Edmund's eyes; secondly that whether or not this character is canonical is immaterial given the story from which Edmund's interpretation arises; thirdly that the rest of this story is fucking awesome.
Further reflection of this story forces me to list the following three things I especially loved: firstly Eustace's paragraph, which containing the phrase keeping to his bed and prefacing names with "that horrible" and generally making himself a blight on ship-life is officially the best paragraph I can think of offhand; secondly the narrative voice, which is mostly Lewis and yet distinctly Pen and contains frequent hilarious parenthetical asides; thirldy Caspian would never be tempted; he would never hinge his world on a sweet.
I must, however, lodge a complaint against the imperfect beta job done, because this fic deserves much better than conspicuously absent commas.
In conclusion, four is too many paragraphs. Thank you.
Sincerely,
Tris